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fromthesoul.diary-x Aug. 19, 2004 -- 11:57 p.m. |
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fromthesoul.diary-x [re-review] Username - I actually like it. From the soul. Like, this writing is from the soul, like writing out to be. A little cheesy, but I like it. First Impression - Check it out! It's Jesus! That guy's a pimp. Errors - Yes! You fixed the Shakira thing! But on your favorites page, you list you "This is the American Dream?" entry twice. 9/10 Layout - I still don't much care for religion, and I think I liked the other layout better... but the text is well spread-out here, so I am not complaining much. The title, while also overly religious-y, makes a lot of sense if you believe in that stuff. Check me out, I'm like New and Improved. Same Great Taste, Less Judgemental. You tweaked the layout and gave credit for the original, I like that. 17/20 Content - Well, since this is a re-review, the emphasis will be on the newer stuff. Sooo started here. I liked it a little. You're actually quite wise there, saying that the only thing that matters is how you feel about yourself. That's good. Lots of chicks don't realize that. Insert applause here. Man, little kids are awesome. Especially when that little kid is you. This was good. I feel the same way. Poetry? Blech. I still despise poetry. Aaaand more poetry. Death! Brilliant. See, I told you you were an intelligent girl! Since we've been talking and crap, this, while a bit on the long side, did actually interest me. If we hadn't been talking though, and I didn't know from our conversations how much you like him and crap, I probably wouldn't care that much. Just something to keep in mind. However it IS your diary, and you Do need a place to vent, so... whatev. Don't pay attention to me. The second to last paragraph here was good. That was good. I think all writers feel like that from time to time. Aaaand I'm back to where I started last time with entries. So I guess I'm done. I stand by my previous statements. You're an intelligent girl, and you avoided writing about god for a couple of weeks because you know I hate that shit. Coast is clear now, you cn go back to writing about him, 'cause I know he's important to you and all that. I bet you were cringing all during that last paragraph, because I didn't capitalize "he" or "him" or "god". Hahaha. Awesome. Only criticisms I have are that if I hadn't been talking to you and known you, I wouldn't care too much about the boy stuff, and your entries are a little long to hold my attention, and you tend to talk about the same things. Whatever floats your boat though, right? Right. I'm always right. 45/65 Would I Come Back? - Ehhh maybe. 2/5 Bonus - Jesus is a motherfuckin' P-I-M-P.+1/5 Total - 74/100. Watch, I bet you stop talking to me now that the review is done. Ahhh well. Such is the solitary life of a reviewer. Reviewed by Amanda | ||
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