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glass-veins Jun. 24, 2004 -- 1:16 a.m. |
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| glass-veins Usernasme - Glass veins. Okay. I like it. If I saw it in a list, I'd probably click it. I like that you explain the username. I could have guessed, but I still think it's nice that you took time to get it across. No numbers, no X's, no "razor" or "blood" or "princess" anywhere, so full points. 5/5 First Impression - We have a picture of a boy and a girl, looks kind of depressing... "brand me pretty girl"... yeah, definetely depressing. I'm seeing no errors though, so hopefully you aren't completely retarded like the other 95% of diaryland that I've run into. 5/5 Errors - Your older page doesn't match, the image is broken, and the layout changes halfway through the entries. I understand that you changed it quite some time ago and that diaryland is just slow about these things though, so I'll be nice. Did you know that you can fix the layout on each entry if you go back through and edit the entries? I know it takes a long time to do, but you don't have many entries and if you wanted it sorted out quicker, that will do it. Punctuation and grammar are good these days with you, but you spell pagan wrong. This bothers me a little bit because you make references to "pagon" rituals. Anyways. Fix the layout inconsistancies and you're good to go here. 4/10 Layout - We'll ah... go with the first one I ran into because it's the only one that appears to actually be functioning. I like the black background and yellow text, it's easy to read. I like the feel of the layout for some reason and I think it suits your writing and personality; a dark background and history and dark overtones, but an optimistic and hopeful feeling about it because of the yellow. No, I did not just do a psychoanalysis on your layout. My only problems here are the fact that your older page and half your entries are off. And that guy has a really big nose. But that's hardly your fault. 16/20 Content - You've had a rough life, kid. From what I can tell, you're doing better now, but I worry about that too. From a reviewer's point of view, your writing is good. You use vivid imagery [and frequently mention the greek gods. Did I mention that I love the greek gods? No? Well now you know.] and have this addictive writing style. However, you maintain a ... less than comfortable distance from your diary and your readers. You frame moments here more for your benefit than anyone else's, and I think that's wonderful, but something about the way you do it feels like you are not giving it your all. I know there is more to you than your boyfriend and your depression, but you do not talk about it. You might want to explore those other aspects of yourself through your diary. Now to go all motherly on you. You are a very beautiful girl, and you seem happy with this Keith fellow, but I worry about your latest entry. I fear you will become dependant on him, and because you're still young, that isn't healthy. Before we can stand together, we must stand alone. I could relate to this a lot; being trapped inside is a bitch. there were some other entries I really liked but if I have to sift through your older entries again I am going to stab myself in the face from frustruation. No 'fense. 49/55 Would I Come Back? - Sure, to see how you were doing, make sure that everything was okay and maybe drop some words of encouragement. Maybe. 5/5 Bonus - The boy on your layout is wearing lipstick. Boys + black lipstick = instant super ultra turn on. I give you +2/5 Total - 86/100. Ta daaaa! My first review EVA. I was a lot nicer than I thought I would get to be... that's kind of depressing. Reviewed by Amanda | ||
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