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lostgem Oct. 30, 2004 -- 8:00 p.m. |
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| lostgem
Yeah. Well. You've only been waiting for like three weeks. I guess it's about time I got around to actually reviewing you, now isn't it? Username - Well. You explain it. That's good. I don't really like it though; it doesn't stand out or catch my attention or anything. First Impression - Why is there a picture of a half naked black woman on your diary? Errors - You don't capitalize your titles. Man, I fucking hate that. And that black lady there might want to consider shaving. You know what I mean. And the spelling and the grammar and the acronyms and the ellipses... eesh. 2/10 Layout - Seriously, a half naked black woman? What where you on? I really don't get it. I mean, with the fur there, my first thought was that you had a tribal thing going. Which is cool, I guess, because you hate racism. And then I saw the french manicure and the title and decided your layout was about sex. Which is not as awesome as fighting racism. In fact, it is a little disgusting. BUT, theme entirely aside, that's a really ugly shade of green, and what is with that disgusting raindbow bar at the bottom? And can you make your iMood transparent please? And the links at the top look weird and crowded. I'd like it better if you moved the previous/next arrows to a seperate level, or at least on the same level. It looks weird when they're split like that. Points off because it wasn't self-designed and I don't really like it. 10/20 Content - This'll be a little difficult because you have me on your list of favorites [god dammit, you people need to stop doing that and then requesting reviews...], but I'll do my best to be fair and balanced [pffft, haha]. I'll start from the beginning with you because you only have a hundred entries or so. A dramatic first entry. You're frustrated. Meh. Not terribly interesting. Too many ellipses. Fucking distracting. Stop. Also, I liked the irony in that entry. You claim you're not slutty anymore, but you want to go into the adult entertainment industry. I mean, that's pretty much the definition of "slut". You're going to be selling your body. But I'm just sayin'. Cheesy way to end an entry. Honestly. "Stay tuned to find out"? Fucking... you're supposed to avoid clichés in writing. I'm seeing lots of daylogging so far. You're daylogging about serious stuff, but that doesn't change the fact that you're fucking daylogging. Quit saying "oh joy". Honestly, it's irritating the fuck out of me. JUST FUCKING STOP IT. Yes, I know, you think it's sarcastic and clever and awesome, but it isn't. It's fucking stupid and you've overusing it. Are you getting any therapy? Because if you're not, you seriously might want to look into that. Why do guys cling to you? Because you let them. You're talking about this "new guy" who I assume you've known for a very short time, about how he's telling you he loves you. Come ON. Guys seriously aren't like that unless they want to get into your pants. Run. Run now. Jesus fuck. You even overuse ellipses in your fucking conversations. AUGH DEATH. Okay. We're into the end of August now, and you're juggling two boyfriends and making a big fucking deal over something that's all your fault. You're still raping the ellipses and the "OH JOY" and "OH YAY" expressions and I caught an "LOL....goodie" somewhere earlier. Christ. I think I'd rather be ripping off my toenails right now than reading this. Another brilliant ending, as usual. I've read through maybe fifty entries so far, and I have yet to see you say anything deep or profound or meaningful, and I'm getting kind of pissed off. All you do is talk about how one boy said this and another boy said this and a third boy said this and this and you're talking to eight more guys online and you feel SO BAD, really, you do, but for some reason you just can't stop talking to all of these boys or fucking settle down and pick JUST ONE and you know what? Maybe it would be in your best interest not to be with anyone or talk to any of them at all. You're obviously very confused and unstable, and you need to learn to stand on your own two feet. But I digress. Are you sure you're eighteen? Because you have the grammar and writing skills of my sixteen year old classmates. The fucking three dots, I swear... HA. Stop typing words in all capitals in your diaries. In conversations, or review sites where you yell at people for being retarded, it's okay, but not in a personal diary. Also, stop addressing your audience. Write for you. Quizzes. Bloody waste of time in a diary. The acronyms have to stop too. "lol" and "OMG" every paragraph is really starting to piss me off, and trust me, you don't want to give me more reasons to get pissed off. Fuck. This is irritating. I can't handle reading the rest of this. You talk about being bulimic and juggling guys like fucking plastic balls and your stupid drama, and you don't even talk about it well. You don't learn anything from any of it. Just... augh. Work on the spelling, and the grammar, and the ellipses, and the acronyms, and start writing for yourself, and dig deeper into events. Don't just recap events, think about why they're important, why you're bothering to write about them. I guess you're not completely hopeless, though. You've been through some stuff and you have the potential to not be a complete moron. 13/65 Would I Come Back? - I'd make a vomitting joke here, but that would be pretty fucked up, all things considered.0/5 Bonus - You're kinda hot, aside from the whole check me out being as skinny as a fucking coat-rack thing. +1/5 Total - 26/100. Heh heh. Oh man. Bring on the removal from the favorites list! Reviewed by Amanda | ||
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