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lunarshadow Jul. 05, 2004 -- 6:54 p.m. |
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| lunarshadow Username - Oooo, Lunar Shadow, how DARK and MYSTERIOUS. First Impression - Oooo, BLACK and DARK BLUE that is INSANELY HARD TO READ... how DARK and MYSTERIOUS. Errors - I can't read the motherfucking text without highlighting it. Work on that. 7/10 Layout - The picture bothers me. The dark text on a slightly darker background bothers me. The layout in general bothers me. It's all dark and angsty. At the bottom for your fucking comments link you have "[insert number here] orgasms. Can you make me feel good?" That's... well, it's fucking retarded. And I'm being nice. You also don't put the date/time/etc crap anywhere on your entries and that bothers me a lot. 8/20 Content - I've seen your banners around and I have to say, I wasn't too thrilled to be doing this review. Actually, I'm still not. So far you've written about Britney Spears, maybe winning the lottery, and some obsession you have. ... What the fuck? You're not allowed to go from "blah blah blah heartbreak mm yes poignant moment," to, "I spent 35 dollars yesterday on makeup." That's terrible fucking transitioning right there. And then you talk about piercings, and your mother. And mixed in with all of this bad transitioning are sex entries. UGH STOP IT STOP IT NOW. And in an entry, you can't go "All that remins is dust, blah blah blah entry here blah blah and when the dust settles all that remains is you." No. That doesn't make goddamned sense. Either there's just dust, or there's just you, or there's just you and dust together. You can't make two seperate statements that -- why the fuck am I bothering? It was poor use of logic in an attempt to sound poetic, 'nuff said. And the fact that you spell it "thru" pisses me off to no fucking end. I know, I know, technically it is a word, but still. It just bothers me. You daylog a lot. And when you're not daylogging, you're writing about sex, or "suicide", or trying to be poetic and deep and pretty much just pissing me off. You transition poorly from paragraph to paragraph [I know, I know, so do I, but all of my paragraphs have a common thread: trashing you] and your entries just don't interest me. You talk about guys you should have married, your mother, and other shit like that, NOT TO MENTION that I have to highlight the fucking text to be able to read these pearls of wisdom. I don't know. You're fucking retarded. How old are you? You seem like an adult with a twelve year old's mentality and interests that can spell and capitalize. Most of the time. 23/65 Would I Come Back? - If I need another reason to kill myself, sure thing. 1/5 Bonus - I was listening to a bad ass CD while reviewing you. +1/5 Total - 40/100. You're lucky I'm not still giving points for username and first impression. change your unbelivebly dark fucking text, and request a re-review or something. And everybody should go out and by the Chrono Trigger soundtrack right now. I should probably mention here that you've linked to "diary-nazi.DAIRYland.com" and you might consider fixing that. Reviewed by Amanda This chick whos name I can't remember's comments: Hmmm, well I asked for your opinion which I got so thanks BUT I didn't ask for things I'm not allowed to do or can't do in my own diary. I thought reviews were given to recieve suggestions and input? You say bad transitioning, I say that was my thought process, so kill me. I guess I am retarded for writing in the moment. Shit, if I had wrote about the same stuff everyday you'd bitch about that too. Who says anything has to make sense anyways? FYI, there are no rules in writing. I'm curious though, what's so angsty about a picture of the moon? And for the record, I'm 23 which if you had actually done a thorough review rather than picking apart a couple recent entries, you would have known that. OH, and the date/time/etc crap IS located in the top right hand corner. Anyways, thanks. I'm happy I pissed you off, made my day! I think she was more pissed off than I was. Bahaha. She later went on to write a disclaimer that I like to believe was inspired by me. | ||
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