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| offence Username - I really like it. Offence, as in, a variation of offense, as in, either the opposite of defense or offense as in offending people. Either way, it suggests aggression and as we all know, I really like aggression. Full points, beeyatch. 5/5 First Impression - Some random guy who I don't know but you apparently like to the left. Some easy to read text. No sticky caps, proper grammar/punctuation/etc. First entry I read [because it was most recent] was this one and you're ranting about class... hrgh. I dislike diaries like that. Ahh damn. Disclaimer. YOU BURN. 4/5 Errors - You don't seem to be terribly fond of capitalizing your titles... but you do capitalize the entry. Um, why? That's all I'm seeing for now. Good deal. 9/10 Layout - Self designed, featuring that one guy that you adore so much, Joahgd Pheaojkfka. I can't remember his name and I am too lazy to check. Joaquin Phoenix, that's it. Black and white. Navigation is easy, you have all your extras under one page and everything else off to the side there. The only real problem I have with it is the fact that it's an actor. I know he inspires you to write and all that, I've just never really seen the point in idolizing celebrities via diaryland template. 17/20 Content - Your very first entry made me laugh a little. You say twice that you don't really care who reads the diary. If you don't care... why are you mentioning it so much? O_o. YES! OH MY GOD YES! I actually saw that fucking Little Prince video; it was a musical and afterwards I wanted to break something. The book was so beautiful and they mutilated it so terribly... APC's The Thirteenth Step is a let down, by the way. There are really only two songs worth listening to on the album. And, now that I find you are against the defiling of The Little Prince, and a fan of both James Dean and APC, you can do no wrong as far as this review goes. Except for that fucking disclaimer, and the fact that you review your own reviews. Seriously, that's just stupid. The disclaimer accomplishes nothing and neither does reviewing your own reviews. Oh holy shit, you also think Daniel Radcliffe is terrible! I'm the only other person I know that dislikes him. Everybody else is busy worshipping the ground he walks on. Okay, anyways, down to the content itself. You have 821 entries, so I just read the most recent ones. I can't remember where I stopped and started. Anyways. Your writing is a mix of daylog and ... other stuff that is not daylog. The daylog isn't typical daylog; you've made it tolerable even for me: The Most Apathetic Girl in the World. I skimmed some, I won't lie. I liked your more emotional entries; they didn't make me want to gouge out my eyes with a rusty fork because they were so unjustified and angst-ridden. Good times. I also liked your political entries a lot. I always enjoy hearing other people's political opinions, no matter how misguided. Not that yours are; we agree on most things. I'm just saying. Suggestion time, seeing as that's the point of a review and all. There's really only one thing you do that you might want to change. Occasionally you update just for the sake of updating, or to tell us that you are bored. That may be what you're feeling and all, but writing down how this place is boring and how you are boring doesn't really accomplish anything. On days like that, you might want to go find something to write about instead of waiting for inspiration to hit you. One Word is good for that. Check it out. In spite of that though, your writing is good, and as you get older I think it will improve. Experience will give you broader horizons, and as you encounter more, you will have more to write about and more to say. Did I mention that I love you? 49/55 Would I Come Back? - Actually... I probably would. And not to see if I pissed you off, either! Whoah. 5/5 Bonus - Did you know that James Dean was gay? If you didn't, now you do. Bonus points for your love of James Dean and hatred of Bush and kickass books being turned into not so kickass movies. 3/5 Total - 92/100 "I love the moon. I love its strong graceful charismatic aura, its mystery, its gentle guiding light. It isn't audacious and loud and obnoxious like the sun. It is, in fact, the anti-sun. And that's why I love the moon." Congrats; A WINNER IS YOU! Reviewed by Amanda Yelen's comments: Yay, I'm a super cool person! Thanks for the awesome review; came at exactly the right time. And uh... I was going to say something but I can't bleeding remember what it was. Nevermind. Suffice to say that I appreciated your effort and I went to visit your diary and I liked it so I have a new buddy on my list. Good times. | ||
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