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starsarefalling.diary-x Jul. 28, 2004 -- 2:12 p.m. |
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| starsarefalling.diary-x Let me just say, right here, that I think Tofu did an awesome fucking job with his first review. If you haven't read it, click the left arrow up there ^ and do so now. Okay, I'm done. Username - Ooo, stars are falling, oo. That's one step above falling stars, which is one step above ~*~0FaLlInG sTarzZz0~*~ which is one step above getting anally raped by the sharp end of a shovel. First Impression - Black and white and.. what the fuck is up with your capitalization? Anyway. I bet you're just a regular beam of sunshine, aren't you? Errors - ... .... So, I just clicked on a random entry on your old page to check and make sure everything was working properly... and... well, I clicked here. Not ONLY does that template not match, because I guess you changed it recently [no! NO NO NO NO NO EVIL DEATH YOU NEVER DO THAT MAKE SURE ALL YOUR ENTRIES MATCH GOD DAMMIT] but in addition to that, you have suddenly morphed into a twelve year old fucking AOLer. The only words you mamange to spell correctly are the ones in the marilyn manson lyrics you posted [manson! and lyrics! IN ONE POST! You are giving me waaaay too much material here], and I'm pretty sure you got those off of a lyrics site. So no points here for you. Bwahaha. Isn't luck a bitch?0/10 Layout - Black Tape for a Blue Girl... you know, my ex girlfriend used to like them. While we were dating. Similarly, I used to like my ex girlfriend. But things change, and I hate being reminded of her, so no points for you. And cut out that crucifix shit you have going on. It wouldn't bother me if you were like hardcore religious and all that, but you're just doing it because crucifixes are so Gothik OMG LOL!!1! 10/20 Content - Ve ah startink heah. The first sentence there does NOT make me want to read more of this Your capitalization seriously pisses me off. When you start a sentence with "I", you not only REFUSE to capitalize it, but you capitalize the next word instead like that makes up for something. Um, no. It just makes you look stupid. Example of what you do: "i Sacrifice small animals to Lucifer." Example of what you should do: "I enjoy going outside and doing other normal human activities." I dunno. I guess your refusal to capitalize "I" is you showing your self-hatred in an All New, Super Ultra Mega Creative Way. Excuse me while I burst out laughing. Moving right along. Yar. Woe is me, To Be an Attention Whore, or Not To Be an Attention Whore? Bah. Woe is me, I am so in love. You should probably know, it's spelled "terribly", not "terriably". What are you smoking, and where can I get some? It's possible to re-write all of your entries into two fucking sentences or less. Christ. Look, look. Okay. here. That's your version. It SHOULD be something more like this: "I am so goth OMG, and so tortured, so tortured I can't write here anymore because nobody understands OMG LOL, and like, I went on vacation and it was good because I didn't have to deal with all of this drama [LOL!!] but then like I came back and I was depressed again and I cut myself. The end." See? Two sentences. Anything more than that is excessive. Will you stop raping the ellipses already? Putting three dots after an idea every once in a while is a good thing, it really is. It emphasises a point. Or, if you want to get technical about it, it's actually used to show that something has been ommitted. This is how you ACTUALLY use an ellipses: "He donates money and ILLEGAL DRUGS to charities all over the world." becomes "He donates money ... to charities all over the world." See? It's used in articles to cut away fluff and make a point quicker, or in politics to make someone look better or worse than they are. In writing, ellipses are used to draw out an idea, or as a lengthy pause. Example: "He stared out into the horizon and realized... he could never go back." as opposed to "He... stared out... into the... horizon... and realized... he... could never go... back..." so just cool it, Shatner. Christ, and you end your entries with "toodles". Are you my fucking ex-girlfriend? Now I'm getting paranoid. Like seriously. Okay, okay, I don't think you are. But damn. Stop that too. I always hated it when she did that, even when we were together. Fucking stupid word... she also used to say "assumingly". If I find you saying assumingly too, you are SO unbelievably fucked. Don't post AIM conversations. I don't care. If it's not funny, I'm not going to sit there and read it. Just fucking paraphrase for us. Yeah, okay, fuck it. I'm done reading. You're angsty, and whiny, and you can't capitalize. You have destroyed the three little dots for me. You remind me of my ex girlfriend, quite possibly the largest waste of my time thus far. Your layout upsets me because I have to scroll down, and then scroll down again to change entries, even when the page is maximized. That's probably because of my resolution but I DON'T CARE. You just daylog. With ellipses. Lots and lots of ellipses. 7/65 Would I Come Back? - I'm still trying to make the bleeding stop. 0/5 Bonus - Trenty Treny Trent Trent Mmm... +1/5 Total - 17/100. Things I liked about your diary: -I didn't have to bust out the calculator to add up your score. -Trent. -...uhh... that's it. Sorry. My advice is to go kill yourself now and get it over with. It'll probably make you more popular. And plus, a wise man once said "The only truly Goth people are corpses." Damn. Random Axe of Kindness was such a great comic... Reviewed by Amanda | ||
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