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theascension Jul. 03, 2004 -- 1:53 a.m. |
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| theascension Username - I like it. No numbers, no x's, no references to cutting or fairies or flowers and it isn't your name. It's also rather dark, which I like. You explain it somewhere but I'm too lazy to go find the entry and link it here right now. First Impression - Proper grammar, punctuation, spelling, yadda yadda yadda, some japanese text, and a badass picture. If I was still scoring this section, you would have gotten a give out of five. Errors - You spell "through" as "thru." I guess you're doing it to be cutesy, but you might consider stopping. The novelty wears off after the first nine times or so. Also, here, the scrollbar doesn't match and I can't see any of the entry titles without highlighting them because you made the font color and the background color the same damn color. -hiss- Not to mention that there aren't any links and that pisses me off. Seriously, just... fix your older page so it does what it's supposed to do. I was going to start reading from the beginning with your diary for once, but nooooo... 2/10 Layout - Dark background, bright text, super cool picture. the only problem I have with it is the fact that your scrollbar face color and track color are the same damn color, which makes it a pain in the ass to scroll down the way I do. You might want to change the track color to black or something. And fix your goddamned older page. You're going to hear about that archives page for the rest of the review, you know. 16/20 Content - You made me work hard to get to your first entry, kid, and I'm still not sure ifI got the right one. Yeah, okay, I did. Here. And it's all in motherfucking Japanese. I worked for a good thirty seconds viewing your source code and finding your first entry to be rewarded with.. an entry in a language I can't read. Good deal. All bitterness aside, I like you a lot. A LOT. If you weren't already taken, and you know... not gay, I would be all up on you like nobody's business. Mmm. I've actually had this thought several times before, and bring it up frequently when arguing with my friends about weather people as a whole are "good" or "bad". I like that somebody else has thought of this too. Why are you wasting your time grieving over something you have? You could be out laughing and macking on Kira, but instead you're just sitting there crying "O woe is me! We are all going to diiiiiie! ACK!" Listen, the only people who fear death are those who have regrets, and regrets are easy enough to kill. you just have to understand that things could be worse, and be thankful that they aren't. Go out. Have fun. Spend as much time as possible with your loved ones, and die happy. It's a lot easier than people make it out to be. Fast forward. Just because others strive only towards power does not mean the rest of us must submit and accept that beauty has been destroyed. You imply that humanity is evil because they have killed beauty, and then you say that there is no greater good. This disregard for beauty obviously bothers you; you value beauty quite a bit. To you, a greater good would be protecting beauty. As in, there is a greater good, as in, I win. Bizzatch. I'm sorry, I couldn't help myself. That's when you know you've written something well though, when I take time to stop and argue with it. Ahaha. You have this bizarre style of writing. I can't decide if you're a robotwith no feelings whatsoever, or a lovesick teenaged girl. Either way, I've developed a certain fondness for you. The only thing that bothers me about your writing is that it's all centered around Kira. I know you love him, and he's the only person in the world you've ever been attracted to, and you're life partners, and yadda yadda yadda, but you've got more in you than that. You've got ideas and thoughts about the world [even if most of them ARE less than... what's the word? Pleasant.] and I want to hear them. I know, I know, it's YOUR diary for YOU, but you asked for a review so I'm giving you one. And stop being so motherfucking angsty. There's more to life thatn razorblades and trenchcoats. Like daffodils. Daffodils are nice. 57/65 Would I Come Back? - Honestly? Probably not. You remind me of this one friend I have, and while I do love him to itty bitty pieces, I already spend an obscene amount of time thinking about him and I don't need to waste any more. No 'fense. 1/5 Bonus - You like Vampire Hunter D, and South Park, and various other things that I like too. Not to mention that you remind me of Shithead [the previously mentioned friend] and that you're probably the cutest widdle goth boi EVA! If I ever saw you in real life, I would be overcome with the urge to just squeeze the crap out of you. You totally needed to know that. +2/5 Total - 79/100. 1)Fix your archives page. 2)Talk about something else. Take up a hobby or something, 'cause those of us who haven't been in love [or have but aren't admitting it] are having difficulty relating. Reviewed by Amanda Scion's comments: I wanted to thank you personally for the review, and sorry about not getting to it sooner. I was expecting you to ass-fuck me much harder than you did, actually. On top of that, your journal is pretty amazing. It feels nice to be reviewed by somebody with actual intelligence. | ||
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