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wacewace Jul. 23, 2004 -- 11:35 a.m. |
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| wacewace Username - It's almost disgustingly cutesy. I guess it's a take on your nickname [Stacie Wacie]. I might click on it. It starts with W, and I like names that start with uncommon letters. First Impression - My, how very... pink. Sacie Wacie. Pink layout. Are you twelve? [No, you're not, but your layout would beg to differ.] Errors - IMOOD OF DEATH. WITH A BORDER AROUND IT. AUGH. 8/10 Layout - I really don't like pink. I mean, it isn't SO bad, and I can handle it in moderation, but... everything is pink or white. EVERYTHING. It reminds me of cotton candy, and that's all good and fine, but it's fluffy and airy and empty and I get the impression your writing is going to be the same way. If you could integrate some black in there [maybe make the links black?] I think it would be better. No, I'm not just saying this because I like black, or because I hate pink, I just think it might look better. Not to mention that there's black in the typewriter. 13/20 Content - This was the first entry I saw. You talk about FF4. FF4!! I love it when chicks play video games. I love it even more when said chicks play games that I have deemed the best ever. In this entry, you start off speaking in third person, and then switch to first person. I don't like that. I think that if you HAVE to be speaking in third person, you should at least keep it consistant throughout the whole entry. You don't have a cast page, so I'm not sure who this Chris guy is yet. Boyfriend? Best friend? Inquiring minds want to know! Yeah, okay, boyfriend. Aahah. How could you not like 1984?! That's such a great book! You suck at updates. And I never bitch about updates. I feel like I shouldn't be reviewing this because most of it is old stuff. Okay, anyways. You treat this diary like a diary and I think that's good. You daylog but it holds my attention. The entries are, for the most part, amusing. You don't do the dramatic teenage bullshit and I like that. However, you really need to write more, and I feel like you should have more extras. I don't know very much about you and I dont't feel like sifting through your older entries tof ind out how old you are. A biography or something would be nice. And a cast page. Get a damn cast page. I want some political rants from you or something. Or more about God, or abortion. Things like that. I want to know what your opinions are and I have a feeling that said rants would be written well. On another note, kill the iMood! I hate iMood. 45/65 Would I Come Back? - Maybe. I like your diary, and I can see myself dropping by every so often. 3/5 Bonus - You're a reviewer and you've got hate mail posted. That was nice. I could relate. I think shit like that is hilarious. +1/5 Total - 70/100. Fix the layout, write some more, and apply for a re-review. I think you're better than that score. Now I'm depressed. I was on a roll for a while there. I need someone else to tear apart, dammit. Reviewed by Amanda Stacie's comments: Hey Amanda! Thanks for the review! | ||
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